Before:
When discussing the actual dialogue, Hultgren believes, “In asking the question about who is his neighbor, the lawyer is not seeking information…. The question really means: Where do I draw the line? How large must the circle be?”[1] This Hultgren quote reminds me of a children’s game, such as “hot lava.” If one exits the defined parameters, they are instantly engulfed by hot lava. Essentially, people residing in the lava are not neighbors.
After:
When discussing the actual dialogue, I noticed that Hultgren believes, “In asking the question about who is his neighbor, the lawyer is not seeking information…. The question really means: Where do I draw the line? How large must the circle be?”[1] This Hultgren quote reminds me of a children’s game, such as “hot lava.” If I exit the defined parameters, then I am instantly engulfed by hot lava. Essentially, since I reside in the lava, I am not a neighbor.
Due to this change in the voice, the words become "more energetic, more persuasive, and easier to understand" (37). I believe improves my work because the audience can better relate to the author (me) and the text itself. Instead of a stranger playing the children's game, I am. It becomes more personal and conversational with "I."