Voice and Echo

Voice and Echo

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Before: This sometimes morally gray portrayal of Satan causes readers to question both God’s motives and His omniscience. God the Father is supposed to be the most perfect, all-knowing being in existence, but this interpretation forces people to consider the idea that God’s hands may not be able to reach everything.

After: This specific portrayal of Satan in which he appears to be morally gray can cause us to question both God's motives and His omniscience. After all, God the Father is supposed to be the most perfect and all-knowing being in existence, but this interpretation may certainly cause you to consider the idea that God's hands may not be able to reach everything.

Interestingly enough, it was hard for me to find a selection of my essay to mess with the voice of, as I tend to write more playfully by default! I think it's the actor in me smile

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Re: Voice and Echo

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This change really seems to provide more clarity to what you're trying to say. in the first sentence, there is a lot of "y"s that can cause the reader (like myself) to slow down and have to re-read carefully to capture the rhythm of the sentence. I think your adjustments certainly helped with the sentence flow