Discussion 3

Discussion 3

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      For example, certain Christian denominations, such as Oneness Pentecostals and Jehovah’s Witness, don’t believe in the Holy Trinity, as Baptists and Catholics do. If a topic of this size is debated, then most certainly smaller subjects, such as biblical narratives will be, as well. 

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     For example, certain Christian denominations, such as Oneness Pentecostals and Jehovah’s Witness, don’t believe in the Holy Trinity, as Baptists and Catholics do. The Holy Trinity is a teaching that professes the existence of one God, but that God is divided into God the Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit.  If a topic of this size is debated, then most certainly smaller subjects, such as biblical narratives, will be, as well. 


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Re: Discussion 3

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I truthfully kind of struggle with this section of the book. I was always taught to write to your audience respecting their prior knowledge. If we are writing papers for a religion course it is hard for me to distinguish jargon from what I expect people to know having entered into a 300 level religion course. I have a hard time following this section of the book. Instead of removing big words wouldn't it be easier to just remove superfluous language for the sake of sounding smart? I do not know if anyone else can relate...
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Re: Discussion 3

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I think that this edit is a great one. I feel like people even in the denominations that believe in the Holy Trinity find it a hard thing to grasp sometimes. So, I think that providing that information is helpful to the reader.

Also, Cosette, I get where you are coming from. I think that I tend to over explain because I feel like people reading my paper in this course would already have some background knowledge. In efforts to not be too elementary in my writing I end up doing exactly that.