Old: We know Jesus as God’s son and leader of the Christian movement.
New: Christians know Jesus as God’s son and leader of the Christian movement.
Changing we to christians changes the direction of the text towards a group of people instead of everyone reading the paper. It also keeps the clarity of who i am referring to in the passage. I seem to have assumed that people knew i was christian too...
Old: In the process of exploring this question, i will elaborate on the importance of Jesus’s traits and what sets Him apart
New: In the process of exploring this question, this paper will stress the importance of Jesus’s traits and what sets Him apart.
Once again, i remove myself from the equation and point back to the people that paper is about.
I had to make MANY adjustments like this throughout the paper and it ovrall just gave more clarity to my thesis and who it was important to