Don't forget to use the new naming label I requested.
Here are my thoughts:
Set up and PP1 make sense. Technically, I would say PP1 is the decision to go visit the family.
MP of the rape scene. Why is this the MP? It seems kind of par for the course. It might be more impactful if Isaac was behaving very nicely for all of Act 2 so far. Margret began to think of Isaac as an ally in her whole family dynamic. But then he snaps and turns violent.
The MP should be the unexpected twist in the middle of the story where the main character can now fully focus on the goal and the main obstacle. How does this scene change her direction?
The climax – slapping Poppy is a tense scene, but a climax should involve Margret more. Perhaps it could involve Lucy also, in some kind of confrontation with Margret, Isaac vs. the rest of the family.
Resolution: make it more clear. Is Margret going to stay with Isaac? But she keeps the literature in case she needs to change her mind?
Here are my thoughts:
Set up and PP1 make sense. Technically, I would say PP1 is the decision to go visit the family.
MP of the rape scene. Why is this the MP? It seems kind of par for the course. It might be more impactful if Isaac was behaving very nicely for all of Act 2 so far. Margret began to think of Isaac as an ally in her whole family dynamic. But then he snaps and turns violent.
The MP should be the unexpected twist in the middle of the story where the main character can now fully focus on the goal and the main obstacle. How does this scene change her direction?
The climax – slapping Poppy is a tense scene, but a climax should involve Margret more. Perhaps it could involve Lucy also, in some kind of confrontation with Margret, Isaac vs. the rest of the family.
Resolution: make it more clear. Is Margret going to stay with Isaac? But she keeps the literature in case she needs to change her mind?