https://moodle.bsc.edu/pluginfile.php/586715/mod_forum/post/127061/Live%20Wire%20Synopsis.pdf
Replying for the record (I believe I already emailed you this response):
I still like the story and characters, but I want you to punch up the structure a little bit. As it’s currently written, the ending kind of fizzles out. Add some more twists in Act 2 so you will have some more to play with in Act 3.
Here is a twist you can think about... whoever Jamie's contact is with the police, what if they were "confiscating" the drugs and just using them with their friends, perpetuating the operation for their own benefit. That could lead to some funny twists.
I still like the story and characters, but I want you to punch up the structure a little bit. As it’s currently written, the ending kind of fizzles out. Add some more twists in Act 2 so you will have some more to play with in Act 3.
Here is a twist you can think about... whoever Jamie's contact is with the police, what if they were "confiscating" the drugs and just using them with their friends, perpetuating the operation for their own benefit. That could lead to some funny twists.
In reply to Teddy (Robert T) Champion
Re: Live Wire - 1 Page Treatment
Please send me the following, in one sentence each...
Beginning:
PP1:
MP:
PP2:
Climax:
Resolution/Arc:
Beginning:
PP1:
MP:
PP2:
Climax:
Resolution/Arc: