Full Treatment, double spaced
Well done. The structure and character arc makes sense.
One suggestion – at the end, Joaquin learns where Sivern kept his “fortune.”
Where exactly? In what form is the fortune? Just a bunch of cash?
Perhaps it would be more conflicting if the “fortune” is tied up in the slave trade. Joaquin can’t really access it unless he sells slaves, but obviously this is immoral, so he must choose to give up the fortune.
One suggestion – at the end, Joaquin learns where Sivern kept his “fortune.”
Where exactly? In what form is the fortune? Just a bunch of cash?
Perhaps it would be more conflicting if the “fortune” is tied up in the slave trade. Joaquin can’t really access it unless he sells slaves, but obviously this is immoral, so he must choose to give up the fortune.