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You have a lot of potential for funny scenes. I’m not sure if it goes in the direction I would take it, but it will be fun to write.
Your labels for PP1 and PP2 make it confusing. PP1 is supposed to be the very last thing that ends Act 1 and it should send Simone on her main quest.
PP2 is supposed to be the very last thing in Act 2, and it should set up the final confrontation in Act 3.
But, if you take out the labels, I can follow the 3-act structure.
Your labels for PP1 and PP2 make it confusing. PP1 is supposed to be the very last thing that ends Act 1 and it should send Simone on her main quest.
PP2 is supposed to be the very last thing in Act 2, and it should set up the final confrontation in Act 3.
But, if you take out the labels, I can follow the 3-act structure.