I just saw your other email about the new story (the cop who chases a criminal). This will obviously be a much better opportunity for you to show off your writing skills, so good choice.
Still, I don't see a complete character analysis. What is his character arc? Describe his professional/personal/private life. Etc.
Still, I don't see a complete character analysis. What is his character arc? Describe his professional/personal/private life. Etc.