This story has power potential. I worry it’s too much for a short film. What is the main drama: getting the scholarship, or dealing with his mother’s diagnosis? How do they affect each other? Perhaps his mother inspires him to play better?
It seems like playing at the audition should be the climax, not PP2. After the audition, the resolution is that he wins the competition. How you answer my previous questions might influence what becomes PP2.
It seems like playing at the audition should be the climax, not PP2. After the audition, the resolution is that he wins the competition. How you answer my previous questions might influence what becomes PP2.